One advantage of representative democracy is that citizens elect representatives that are skilled politicians. Indeed, those elected representatives have background knwledge in for example law or politics which allow them to have the answers to a lot of social or political questions. On the contrary, direct democracy doesn’t have any representatives, and the citizens may be not qualified to take political decisions.
Representative democracy also has negative consequences. First, we were talking before about the fact that the representatives are elected, but there is a problem with this election, the representatives may not have the same interests as the citizens. They often do a campaign to be elected only for fame or to have access to some privileges given by the political function, this problem is real in our society and is shown by the absence in the National assembly. Furthermore, an other problem of representative democracy is the fact that it might not give the ability for citizens to express themselves directly and this can lead to a lot of issues when the citizens are against their current political system ; this problem in particular is today seen with the movement of the “Yellow vests” in France, citizens protest to be heard by the politics and access to this direct democracy that gives them the ability to express themselves directly.
To sum up, the representative democracy is nowadays obsolete, the power in this political system is too centralized. If we want to rebuild the essence of democracy we should make the citizens participate more in political areas, ans taking care of not falling in an unlimited sovereignty that can be found in some political forms like for instance the direct democracy.
Explications :
Il n'y avait pas beaucoup de fautes juste quelques mots qui n'allaient pas.
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wolfie
Merci beaucoup ! Est-ce que vous avez pu regarder également les autres essay ?
wolfie
Essentiellement pour me dire les erreurs grammaticales récurrentes et/ou des pistes de progresssion
gabriellecastel0
pour le 2ème tu as mis Chère directeur alors que tu es le directeur :D et thus est un synonyme de therefore ou as a result donc ça ne va pas avec la phrase. La dernière phrase se répète, il faudrait dire: Due to these reasons, I have to reject your request to cancel my opera.
wolfie
Merci énormément ! Concernant la pertinence des idées (+ cohérence) et la grammaire vous en pensez quoi ?
gabriellecastel0
Hmm... franchement les idées sont cohérentes et très pertinentes et le langage est tout à fait correct, c'est vraiment bien!
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One advantage of representative democracy is that citizens elect representatives that are skilled politicians. Indeed, those elected representatives have background knwledge in for example law or politics which allow them to have the answers to a lot of social or political questions. On the contrary, direct democracy doesn’t have any representatives, and the citizens may be not qualified to take political decisions.
Representative democracy also has negative consequences. First, we were talking before about the fact that the representatives are elected, but there is a problem with this election, the representatives may not have the same interests as the citizens. They often do a campaign to be elected only for fame or to have access to some privileges given by the political function, this problem is real in our society and is shown by the absence in the National assembly. Furthermore, an other problem of representative democracy is the fact that it might not give the ability for citizens to express themselves directly and this can lead to a lot of issues when the citizens are against their current political system ; this problem in particular is today seen with the movement of the “Yellow vests” in France, citizens protest to be heard by the politics and access to this direct democracy that gives them the ability to express themselves directly.
To sum up, the representative democracy is nowadays obsolete, the power in this political system is too centralized. If we want to rebuild the essence of democracy we should make the citizens participate more in political areas, ans taking care of not falling in an unlimited sovereignty that can be found in some political forms like for instance the direct democracy.
Explications :
Il n'y avait pas beaucoup de fautes juste quelques mots qui n'allaient pas.
voilaaa!