Bonjour, Je dois inventer la suite de l'histoire the Landlady by Roald Dahl. Pourriez-vous me corriger s'il vous plait? Merci beaucoup d'avance.
No one in the last two to three years has been here except him. How odd he found that. « But this is a bed and breakfast, is it not » ? he said. As she didn’t respond him, he continued « How do you earned the money to keep this going ? »Billy asked prudently. She did not respond to the question but asked « my dear, do you want another cup of tea ? » She did not let him answer, and all of a sudden, she throw him a cup of tea. The beverage was still hot and burned Billy’s hands. The cup was made of faience and when it fell, it cut the skin of his hand. He was so confused and terrified that he couldn’t move. « Why would she do that » was he thinking and at the same time trying to walk back to the stairs. The landlady didn’t let him do a single movement. She jumped on him and grab his neck. She had become fierce.
Mr Weaver was suffocating. « Help, help, help me out ! »but it was just a little whisper. The old lady laughed out. The adrenaline helped Billy to have suddenly a lot of energy. He managed to escape from her hand and took the key that were around her neck. He tried to open up all the rooms. The third one was the right one. The two other guests were there. « Follow me, we have to escape, she is a crazy old lady,get up quickly ! » yelled Billy panicked because he was hearing the hurried foosteps. Suddenly the bell of the bed and breakfast rang.The landlady stopped in the stairs and made her way to the hall to open the door. Billy took advantage of the arrival of this futur victim to leave without the landlady knowing it. The three hostage left the boardinghouse by a window near the entry. Mr.Mullhouse and Mr.Templer thanked him a lot. Billy was unsettled by what just happened .He left the two guys and called the police. In the end, the pub Bell & Dragon would have been better for him.
No one in the last two to three years has been here except him. How odd he found that.
« But this is a bed and breakfast, is it not »? he said.
As she didn’t respond to him, he continued « How do you earn the money to keep this going? »Billy asked prudently.
She did not respond to the question but asked « my dear, do you want another cup of tea? » She did not let him answer, and all of a sudden, she throws him a cup of tea. The beverage was still hot and burned Billy’s hands. The cup was made of faience and when it fell, it cut the skin of his hand. He was so confused and terrified that he couldn’t move. « Why would she do that » was he thinking and at the same time trying to walk back to the stairs. The landlady didn’t let him do a single movement. She jumped on him and grab his neck. She had become fierce.
Mr. Weaver was suffocating. « Help, help, help me out ! »but it was just a little whisper. The old lady laughed out. The adrenaline helped Billy to have suddenly a lot of energy. He managed to escape from her hand and took the key that was around her neck. He tried to open up all the rooms. The third one was the right one. The two other guests were there. « Follow me, we have to escape, she is a crazy old lady, get up quickly ! » yelled Billy panicked because he was hearing the hurried footsteps. Suddenly the bell of the bed and breakfast rang. The landlady stopped in the stairs and made her way to the hall to open the door.
Billy took advantage of the arrival of this future victim to leave without the landlady knowing it.
The three hostages left the boardinghouse by a window near the entry.
Mr. Mullhouse and Mr. Templer thanked him a lot.
Billy was unsettled by what just happened. He left the two guys and called the police.
In the end, the pub Bell & Dragon would have been better for him.
Voila, c'est corriger !! J'espere que sa vous aide
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Eva356
Merci bcp de votre réponse, mais je ne vois pas beaucoup de changement, y avait-il beaucoup de fautes?
noelle1040
nn pas beaucoup sauf quelque fautes d'ortographe ou de vocabulaire mais au total c'est bien
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No one in the last two to three years has been here except him. How odd he found that.
« But this is a bed and breakfast, is it not »? he said.
As she didn’t respond to him, he continued « How do you earn the money to keep this going? »Billy asked prudently.
She did not respond to the question but asked « my dear, do you want another cup of tea? » She did not let him answer, and all of a sudden, she throws him a cup of tea. The beverage was still hot and burned Billy’s hands. The cup was made of faience and when it fell, it cut the skin of his hand. He was so confused and terrified that he couldn’t move. « Why would she do that » was he thinking and at the same time trying to walk back to the stairs. The landlady didn’t let him do a single movement. She jumped on him and grab his neck. She had become fierce.
Mr. Weaver was suffocating. « Help, help, help me out ! »but it was just a little whisper. The old lady laughed out. The adrenaline helped Billy to have suddenly a lot of energy. He managed to escape from her hand and took the key that was around her neck. He tried to open up all the rooms. The third one was the right one. The two other guests were there. « Follow me, we have to escape, she is a crazy old lady, get up quickly ! » yelled Billy panicked because he was hearing the hurried footsteps. Suddenly the bell of the bed and breakfast rang. The landlady stopped in the stairs and made her way to the hall to open the door.
Billy took advantage of the arrival of this future victim to leave without the landlady knowing it.
The three hostages left the boardinghouse by a window near the entry.
Mr. Mullhouse and Mr. Templer thanked him a lot.
Billy was unsettled by what just happened. He left the two guys and called the police.
In the end, the pub Bell & Dragon would have been better for him.
Voila, c'est corriger !! J'espere que sa vous aide