Bonjour, je suis en terminal et je passe les oraux à la rentré j'aimerais savoir si quelqu'un pourrais me dire si ce que j'ai rédiger est bien? Merci d'avance
IDEA OF PROGRESS
I'm going to talk about the notion of progress.
The idea of progress can be defined as an improvement, a development or a change. A technical, scientific and social advance contributes to making the world a better place. Electricity is part of progress as it enables us to do many things such as charging our phones, using our computers, powering engines, having heating..
We can then wonder how things changed in different areas such as technology, medicine or robotization and how people got used to it to the point that they can't do without it anymore?
There are several forms of progress :
- social progress : quality of life, employment, freedom, education...
- scientific progress : medical advances, genetically modified organisms...
- technological progress : robots, advances in communication (internet, mobiles phones..)
In order to illustrate this notion I have chosen 3 documents:
The First document is " Telecommute nation"
Teleworking is when you work at home using a computer, a cellphone, a fax machine, webcams or software such as Skype. It allows you to organize your time as you want. Today telework is being developed and more than 34 million people use.
Teleworking has advantages as to arrange their working time , rest , do not constantly have the boss behind us , no cost and transport but also disadvantages such as not having help straight away, lack of motivation, no contact with colleagues to socialize with them.
I think the teleworking is a good idea because it allows more time with his family and there is less stress.
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The second document is a cartoon " Ajax "
More and more Japanese are using robots but is not very fiable
In the cartoon there is a robot that replaces the man as a receptionist, 2 peoples spying on the robot to see if his work is best done. There is written in the document " we tried humans, but they weren't nice enough ".
The robots have advantages that we do not have such as working 24 hours without breaks, has no feelings, relationships or emotions.
I think the robots are a bad idea because there is more unemployment, and robots are less welcoming than humans.
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And the last document is a video "making diffent" about 2 sisters one of them suffering from Leukemia. The solution was a transplant but they had to find a match. So they parents decided to have another baby. However it was risky because the mother was over 40 yo. It worked and the sister was saved thanks to a bone marrow transplant.
I think it is a good idea to have another child to save the First one.
There are other medical advances:
Artificial heart it is good because it saves lives even if is not yet very reliable. Plastic surgery is a good thing if people had an accident however it may be a bad thing if people want to change apparence. In medecine we also use robots but it may be risky because they can make mistakes.
In conclusion, the new technology has become an essential matter areas. it allows work at home remotely, allows the medicine to save more lives with transplants or robots that eventually replace humans
IDEA OF PROGRESS
I'm going to talk about the notion of progress.
The idea of progress can be defined as an improvement, a development or a change. A technical, scientific and social advance contributes to making the world a better place. Electricity is part of progress as it enables us to do many things such as charging our phones, using our computers, powering engines, having heating..
We can then wonder how things changed in different areas such as technology, medicine or robotization and how people got used to it to the point that they can't do without it anymore?
There are several forms of progress :
- social progress : quality of life, employment, freedom, education...
- scientific progress : medical advances, genetically modified organisms...
- technological progress : robots, advances in communication (internet, mobiles phones..)
In order to illustrate this notion I have chosen 3 documents:
The First document is " Telecommute nation"
Teleworking is when you work at home using a computer, a cellphone, a fax machine, webcams or software such as Skype. It allows you to organize your time as you want. Today telework is being developed and more than 34 million people use.
Teleworking has advantages as to arrange their working time , rest , do not constantly have the boss behind us , no cost and transport but also disadvantages such as not having help straight away, lack of motivation, no contact with colleagues to socialize with them.
I think the teleworking is a good idea because it allows more time with his family and there is less stress.
___
The second document is a cartoon " Ajax "
More and more Japanese are using robots but is not very fiable
In the cartoon there is a robot that replaces the man as a receptionist, 2 peoples spying on the robot to see if his work is best done. There is written in the document " we tried humans, but they weren't nice enough ".
The robots have advantages that we do not have such as working 24 hours without breaks, has no feelings, relationships or emotions.
I think the robots are a bad idea because there is more unemployment, and robots are less welcoming than humans.
____
And the last document is a video "making diffent" about 2 sisters one of them suffering from Leukemia. The solution was a transplant but they had to find a match. So they parents decided to have another baby. However it was risky because the mother was over 40 yo. It worked and the sister was saved thanks to a bone marrow transplant.
I think it is a good idea to have another child to save the First one.
There are other medical advances:
Artificial heart it is good because it saves lives even if is not yet very reliable. Plastic surgery is a good thing if people had an accident however it may be a bad thing if people want to change apparence. In medecine we also use robots but it may be risky because they can make mistakes.
In conclusion, the new technology has become an essential matter areas. it allows work at home remotely, allows the medicine to save more lives with transplants or robots that eventually replace humans
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Pas mal du tout ! Je reprends quelques trucs ;
IDEA OF PROGRESS
I'm going to talk about the notion of progress.
The idea of progress can be defined as an improvement, a development or a change. A technical, scientific and social advance contributes to make the world a better place. Electricity is part of progress as it enables us to do many things such as charging our phones, using our computers, powering engines, having heating..
One (c'est plus joli que "we", car en français on utilise souvent "nous" pour des cas généraux ... ("nous pouvons nous demander ...) mais en anglais ça passe moins je trouve) can then wonder how did things change in different areas such as technology, medicine or robotization and how people got used to it to the point that they can't do without it anymore?
There are several forms of progress :
- social progress : quality of life, employment, freedom, education...
- scientific progress : medical advances, genetically modified organisms...
- technological progress : robots, advances in communication (internet, mobiles phones..)
In order to illustrate this notion I have chosen 3 documents:
The First document is " Telecommute nation"
Teleworking is when you work at home using a computer, a cellphone, a fax machine, webcams or software such as Skype. It allows you to organize your time as you want. Today telework is being developed and over 34 million people use.
Teleworking has advantages like arranging working time , rest , not constantly having the boss behind us , no cost and transport but also disadvantages such as not having help straight away,(j'ai pas bien compris ce que t'as voulu mettre ici :s) lack of motivation, no contact with colleagues to socialize with them.
I think teleworking (sans le "the") is a good idea because it gives anyone more time with his family and there is less stress.
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The second document is a cartoon " Ajax "
More and more Japaneses are using robots but it's not very reliable
In the cartoon there is a robot that replaces the man as a receptionist, 2 peoples spying on the robot to see if his work is best done. The document says " we tried humans, but they weren't nice enough ".
Robots (sans le "the")have advantages that we do not have such as working 24 hours without breaks, has no feelings, relationships or emotions.
I think robots (sans le "the") are a bad idea because there is more unemployment, and robots are less welcoming than humans.
____
And the last document is a video "making diffent" about 2 sisters one of them suffering from Leukemia. The solution was a transplant but they had to find a match. So their parents decided to have another baby. However it was risky because the mother was over 40 yo. It worked and the sister was saved thanks to a bone marrow transplant.
I think it is a good idea to have another child to save the First one.
There are other medical advances:
Artificial heart it is good because it saves lives even if is not yet very reliable. Plastic surgery is a good thing if people have an accident however it may be a bad thing if people want to change appearence. In medecine we also use robots but it may be risky because they can make mistakes.
In conclusion, the new technology has become an essential matter areas. it allows work at home remotely, allows the medicine to save more lives with transplants or robots that eventually replace humans
Voilà !
Si t'as des questions hésite pas ;)
Bonne soirée