bonjour,
je voudrais que vous corrigiez mon texte en anglais. Merci d'avance et désolé pour le dérangement durant les vacances :
She study eight hours a day and she spends two hours on her phone. She loves earth and life science because she likes nature and pets. She rides her horse and plays rock climbing once a week. She is keen on listening at music bus she hates singing.
je voudrais que vous corrigiez mon texte en anglais. Merci d'avance et désolé pour le dérangement durant les vacances :
She study eight hours a day and she spends two hours on her phone. She loves earth and life science because she likes nature and pets. She rides her horse and plays rock climbing once a week. She is keen on listening at music bus she hates singing.
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She studies eight hours a day and she spends two hours on her phone. She loves Earth (ou the earth) and life science because/since she likes nature and pets. She rides her horse and she climbs once a week. She is keen on listening to music but she hates singing.
=> J'ai corrigé les quelques fautes dans ton texte. Il est pas mal mais il il y a beaucoup de répétitions (she). L'idéal serait de remplacer tout ces "she" par le prénom de la personne ou si tu ne le sais pas, envisage de faire des paraphrases de type: "The teenager", "the teenage girl", "the young lady", etc.
Essaie d'utiliser aussi plus de connecteurs logiques au lieu de mettre "and". Par exemple: "She studies eight hours a day while she can spend two hours on her phone." ou
Au lieu d'écrire des "verbes simples", n'hésite pas à utiliser des synonymes ou des expressions: "She is keen on listening to music but she can't stand/bear singing. " ou encore "She appreciates the earth and life science since she enjoys nature and pets."
Hey j'espère avoir pu t'aider un minimum pour ce devoir. Bon courage pour la suite ! ;)