J'ai écrit un texte en anglais pour mon oral de 3ème. Ce texte parle de mes passions , ma personnalité , mes projets futurs. Comme je devrais le dire à l'oral , pouvez vous s'il vous plait rendre les phrases les plus simples possible ? Pouvez vous aussi svp dire un avis sur mon texte car je ne trouve pas qu'il est bien pour un oral ? Merci d'avance. Cet oral doit durer environ 3 minutes !
My name is Lola. I am 14 years old and I am a freshman at xxxxxxxxxx middle school in XXX. Later , I would like to be a school teacher because I really love children. I’am fond of animals , especially cats , because , to me , they are calm and loving. In my spare time. I enjoy painting and acting. It allows me to express myself and as well to free me of tensions. I enjoy cycling I can wander off almost everywhere. After middle school , I would like to go a general high school. I am aware that I will have to work more and that’s what intend to so ! I’am pretty sure I have the skills to go a general High School because I can use computer tools such as Scratch and Libre Office. And I can also speak 3 langages that are:
- French - Spanish - English
After High School , I would want to obtain a Master degree 2 of education and pass the National Education Competition named CRPE to be able a school teacher. This job has always interested me. But what really decided me to do it was the orientation EPI and my work experience at kindergaten.
I think I have the qualities required to be a good school teacher because :
I am responsible and vigilant because I have already had some experiences with children in the past. So , if I was a maitress , I would make sure the children’s security. I listen to others because I have already reasured my friends or family when they were in critical situations. As a maitress , my pupils would the confide in me without any worries. I am also creative because I have already invented kinds of game to occupy my little sister when she was bored. As a school teacher , I would then be able to create new workshops for my pupils.
Despite that , I still have some flaws : I am indecise because I can hardly make choices. And , I’m pretty slow because I can take a lot of time doing my homework. But , I am convinced that the profession of school teacher would suit me well !
Merci.
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RedSpyro
Salut j'suis en 5eme et je pense pouvoir t'aider, pour rendre les phrases les plus simple possible ne te répète pas car tu peux te perdre dans ton texte, attention cependant aux fautes et pour les répétitions par exemples utilise des synonymes comme "Professor" ou "Mistress". Dans ta phrase "to go a general High School" tu peux faire mieux en disant "to go to an general High School" pareil pour la phrase "I would want to obtain" tu peux faire plus court en disant "i want" tout simplement et "I have already had" tu peux la changer en "I had" ou "I already had" et dans la phrase "to be able a school teacher" tu peux l'améliorer en disant "giving me a chance to be a school teacher", "I would make sure the children's security" tu peux le changer en "i would make sure the childrens are safe" dans ta phrase "i have already invented[...]" si tu les a fait quand t'as soeur s'ennuyait ça veut dire que c'était dans le passé donc il faut que tu reformules ta phrase dans le passé "I already had invented" maîtresse s'écrit "mistress" en anglais, "would the confide in me" tu peux le changer en "can confide to me". Sinon ton texte dans l'ensemble est très bien développé, voilà j'espère t'avoir aidé, bonne chance.
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