Hey, j'ai un exposé oral pour demain en Anglais sur un superhéro que j'ai crée, voici une partie de l'exposé, j'aurais besoin de vos avis et de savoir si j'aurais fais des fautes, merci !
Kate Marsh was born in France, she was raised by her dad, a policeman, who taught her justice. When she was eleven, Kate Marsh saw her friend commit suicide because he was bullied at school. Kate didn't manage to save him and since then she decided to follow her father's crime-fighting footsteps. Kate started to save lives by feeding wandering animals and by helping her classmates who were victims of bullying.
When Kate gained strenght and bravery, she commited herself to catch bigger criminals. Kate finally rewarded when she was sixteen, she has since been called " Everyday's Superhero".
Kate Marsh was born in France, she was raised by her dad, a policeman, who taught her justice. When she was eleven, Kate Marsh saw her friend commit suicide because he was bullied at school. Kate didn't manage to save him and since then she decided to follow her father's crime-fighting footsteps. Kate started to save lives by feeding wandering animals and by helping her classmates who were victims of bullying.
When Kate gained strenght and bravery, she commited herself to catch bigger criminals. Kate finally rewarded when she was sixteen, she has since been called " Everyday's Superhero".
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Salut, je suis bilingue et je crois que je peux t'aider.
Alors quand tu dis "he was bullied", c'est mieux de dire "he was being bullied". Ensuite, tu dis "wandering animals". Remplace par "lonely animals". Finalement, "Kate finally rewarded when...", c'est faux. Mets plutôt "Kate was finally rewarded when...".
Voila, j'espere que sa ta aider!