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J'aurai besoin d'aide en anglais svp, si quelqu'un pourrait me corriger mes fautes
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Jonathan attended the 100th memorial day on November 11th, 2014 in the Tower of London where 4 million people gathered. Harry participated in the 2GM. He knew the sorrow bound(connected) to the victims of the 1GM and the 2GM. He lived thus personally the war and his repercussions on the population. Today he helps the refugees and the vulnerable people by asserting to right their rights.
Jonathan Jones is a journalist for the British magazine The Guardian. Jonathan Jones never participated in the war. He is strongly opposed to war and the use of poppies to remember the dead soldiers. He thinks that the invention of the nationalist term caused the first world war. He thinks that the commemoration on November 11th at the Tower of London is not a good thing because the British only come to mourn their dead while France and Russia have also had victims. (They are patriotic) and that would serve the anti-immigration political party Ukip. Beside, he regrets the use of a monument in tribute to the victims of the First World War because it is not worthy (representative) of what the fighters have lived. Moreover, he regrets the use of a monument in tribute to the victims of the 1st world war because it doesn't represent what the fighters lived. Harry Leslie Smith is 93 years old. This man is a war veteran of the Second World War who opposes too the use of poppies. Indeed, for him it became a latest fad, too much mediatized. 3) Today if we do not carry(wear) of poppies it's as if we did not respect the deaths of the great war. People feel sometimes forced to wear a poppy. He wore poppies with the aim of fighting against the war so that ever it does not take place. The war exists even today and is not ready to stop he thus sees no utility to wear a poppy because he is partisant to the motto « never again » on the commemorative monument. But in many countries such as Syria and Libya, the war is in full swing and kills many victims as during the two World Wars. Today, wearing poppy is only a matter of politics. Indeed, it is simple to wear a poppy for the respect of the dead after the death of many civilians. Indeed, to carry him a poppy would justify the war crimes and would not reflect the convictions of each one. Harry is afraid that the new generation thinks that the symbols push the young people towards a patriotism without reflection. Wearing a poppy because it's bad seen not to wear it and not for personal reasons only to honor the cliches of war is not what Harry wants. The poppies should serve the living who lost loved ones during the war, the difficulties of the refugees and help the victims of the war.
Jonathan recommends not to consider war as a national tragedy by remembering only the British dead and not to carry poppies any more. Harry recommends not to wear poppies anymore because they are cliches that honor the war and not stop it. Before, they appeased the sadness of the families whereas today it is a political, economic stake. We must live in the present and help the refugees who are suffering because of the war.
J'aurai besoin d'aide en anglais svp, si quelqu'un pourrait me corriger mes fautes
Merci par avance :)
Voici le texte :
Jonathan attended the 100th memorial day on November 11th, 2014 in the Tower of London where 4 million people gathered. Harry participated in the 2GM. He knew the sorrow bound(connected) to the victims of the 1GM and the 2GM. He lived thus personally the war and his repercussions on the population. Today he helps the refugees and the vulnerable people by asserting to right their rights.
Jonathan Jones is a journalist for the British magazine The Guardian. Jonathan Jones never participated in the war. He is strongly opposed to war and the use of poppies to remember the dead soldiers. He thinks that the invention of the nationalist term caused the first world war. He thinks that the commemoration on November 11th at the Tower of London is not a good thing because the British only come to mourn their dead while France and Russia have also had victims. (They are patriotic) and that would serve the anti-immigration political party Ukip. Beside, he regrets the use of a monument in tribute to the victims of the First World War because it is not worthy (representative) of what the fighters have lived. Moreover, he regrets the use of a monument in tribute to the victims of the 1st world war because it doesn't represent what the fighters lived. Harry Leslie Smith is 93 years old. This man is a war veteran of the Second World War who opposes too the use of poppies. Indeed, for him it became a latest fad, too much mediatized. 3) Today if we do not carry(wear) of poppies it's as if we did not respect the deaths of the great war. People feel sometimes forced to wear a poppy. He wore poppies with the aim of fighting against the war so that ever it does not take place. The war exists even today and is not ready to stop he thus sees no utility to wear a poppy because he is partisant to the motto « never again » on the commemorative monument. But in many countries such as Syria and Libya, the war is in full swing and kills many victims as during the two World Wars. Today, wearing poppy is only a matter of politics. Indeed, it is simple to wear a poppy for the respect of the dead after the death of many civilians. Indeed, to carry him a poppy would justify the war crimes and would not reflect the convictions of each one. Harry is afraid that the new generation thinks that the symbols push the young people towards a patriotism without reflection. Wearing a poppy because it's bad seen not to wear it and not for personal reasons only to honor the cliches of war is not what Harry wants. The poppies should serve the living who lost loved ones during the war, the difficulties of the refugees and help the victims of the war.
Jonathan recommends not to consider war as a national tragedy by remembering only the British dead and not to carry poppies any more. Harry recommends not to wear poppies anymore because they are cliches that honor the war and not stop it. Before, they appeased the sadness of the families whereas today it is a political, economic stake. We must live in the present and help the refugees who are suffering because of the war.
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Jonathan attended the 100th memorial day on November 11th, 2014 in the Tower of London where 4 million people gathered. Harry participated in the second world war. He knew the sorrow bound to the victims of the first and the second world war. He lived thus personally the war and his repercussions on the population. Today he helps the refugees and the vulnerable people by asserting to right their rights.Jonathan Jones is a journalist for the British magazine The Guardian. Jonathan Jones never participated in the war. He is strongly opposed to war and the use of poppies to remember the dead soldiers. He thinks that the invention of the nationalist term caused the first world war. He thinks that the commemoration on November 11th at the Tower of London is not a good thing because the British only come to mourn their dead while France and Russia have also had victims. They are patriotic and that would serve the anti-immigration political party Ukip. Beside, he regrets the use of a monument in tribute to the victims of the First World War because it is not worthy of what the fighters have lived. Moreover, he regrets the use of a monument in tribute to the victims of the 1st world war because it doesn't represent what the fighters lived. Harry Leslie Smith is 93 years old. This man is a war veteran of the Second World War who opposes too the use of poppies. Indeed, for him it became a latest fad, too much mediatized. Today if we do not carry of poppies it's as if we did not respect the deaths of the great war. People feel sometimes forced to wear a poppy. He wore poppies with the aim of fighting against the war so that ever it does not take place. The war exists even today and is not ready to stop he thus sees no utility to wear a poppy because he is partisant to the motto « never again » on the commemorative monument. But in many countries such as Syria and Libya, the war is in full swing and kills many victims as during the two World Wars. Today, wearing poppy is only a matter of politics. Indeed, it is simple to wear a poppy for the respect of the dead after the death of many civilians. Indeed, to carry him a poppy would justify the war crimes and would not reflect the convictions of each one. Harry is afraid that the new generation thinks that the symbols push the young people towards a patriotism without reflection. Wearing a poppy because it's bad seen not to wear it and not for personal reasons only to honor the cliches of war is not what Harry wants. The poppies should serve the living who lost loved ones during the war, the difficulties of the refugees and help the victims of the war.Jonathan recommends not to consider war as a national tragedy by remembering only the British dead and not to carry poppies any more. Harry recommends not to wear poppies anymore because they are cliches that honor the war and not stop it. Before, they appeased the sadness of the families whereas today it is a political, economic stake. We must live in the present and help the refugees who are suffering because of the war.
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