Bonsoir à vous !
Pourriez vous me corriger les fautes grammaticales ou d'orthographes...Merci d'avance :) !
Good morning everyone. Before I begin, I want to thank you all for being here during these bad days.
First of all, I want to say that this is not normal, not normal to grew up with mass school shootings, not normal to send your child with fear in your heart, not normal to hear in the afternoon, that your child is gone and not normal to see your friends diying under your eyes, in your own school.
Whose fault is it ?
This is the fault of OUR governement, which is apathetic and greedy for money. Our governement let teenagers with guns. Our governement let people with guns ! This is inhuman and stark having mad ! How can you do this ! Because of this, behind this supposedly liberty, 66 students died between 2000 and 2018. This should change right now !
So to conclude, I want to say to you, that we can create a movement which fights against the right to bear an arm and which will force this blinded government to secure our schools, because we will never forget what happend, because this attack left us all with wounds that will never heal!
Pourriez vous me corriger les fautes grammaticales ou d'orthographes...Merci d'avance :) !
Good morning everyone. Before I begin, I want to thank you all for being here during these bad days.
First of all, I want to say that this is not normal, not normal to grew up with mass school shootings, not normal to send your child with fear in your heart, not normal to hear in the afternoon, that your child is gone and not normal to see your friends diying under your eyes, in your own school.
Whose fault is it ?
This is the fault of OUR governement, which is apathetic and greedy for money. Our governement let teenagers with guns. Our governement let people with guns ! This is inhuman and stark having mad ! How can you do this ! Because of this, behind this supposedly liberty, 66 students died between 2000 and 2018. This should change right now !
So to conclude, I want to say to you, that we can create a movement which fights against the right to bear an arm and which will force this blinded government to secure our schools, because we will never forget what happend, because this attack left us all with wounds that will never heal!
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Hello :)
J'ai repéré 2, 3 trucs, mais l'ensemble est quasi parfait, bravo !
1 : "it is not normal to grow up..." et non grew. Puisque le verbe est à l'infinitif. "il n'est pas normal de grandir..."
2 : "dying" et non "diying"
3 : je dirais plus "the governement let teenagers carry..." et non with, même si c'est correct aussi.
4 : dans "stark having mad" tu peux enlever le "having" qui est inutile.
Voilà, c'est tout ce que j'ai trouvé :)
très bon travail !
bonne soirée