Pouvez vous s'il vous plait me dire si mon poème en Anglais qui parle de sécher l'école avec un style humoristique , et avec des excuses comme les maladies ect... est bien ou pas ?
Vous pouvez le corriger si il y a des fautes , modifier ect..
Merci d’avance
Title : No school all week long
On Monday, I don't go to school I'm sleeping , and it's cool. I don't intend to get up. I am small , so I still have to grow up.
On Tuesday, I stay in my bed My face is all red I drew pimples on my face with a red pen I have " chicken pox " so I can eat candies in the kitchen
On Wednesday, I coloure black under my eyes I then have like dark circles My parents ask me why I was so exhausted I answered them, I overstudied
On Thursday, it's raining outside I don't want to get wet , I prefer to stay inside I don't want neither chase after the neighbors' dog Nor after a bullfrog
On Friday, all week long, I haven't reviewed any lesson. I'm afraid, I'm gonna get an hour's detention So this Monday, I still won't go to school I'll pretend to have eaten a toadstool
Lola9999
On Tuesday, I feel like staying in bed My face is all red
I had drawn ( ou drew ) pimples on my face with a red pen
I have " chicken pox " so like that I can eat candies in the kitchen
nathea
voilà .. c'est pourça que j'ai modifié.. j'ai misé sur la sonorité "ox".. si tu veux des rimes riches, à ce moment-là, Ted et Bed ne le sont pas à 100% ... ni Pen et kitCHen ...
nathea
j'ai essayé de trouver pour pox, une phrase qui se terminerait par box, par exemple .. comme meal box = I am going to order on the web a meal box .... et puis l'idée de starting blocks m'a plu !!!
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Bonjour
On Monday, I don't go to school
I sleep all day long and it's cool
I don't want to get up
I am too young and I still have to grow up.
On Tuesday, I want to stay home again
I draw pimples with a red pen
I have "chicken-pox"
I really can't be on the starting blocks.
ou pour les 2 premières lignes ==>
On Tuesday, I feel like staying in bed
So I draw pimples and my face becomes all red
..........
On Wednesday, It's raining outside
I don't want to get wet, I'd rather stay inside
ou
On Wednesday it's raining dogs and cats (= il tombe des cordes; expression)
But I have no rain hats (I don't have any rain hats)
I want neither chase after the neighbor's dog
Nor after a bull-frog
I don't want to be chased by the neighbor's dog
I seems too odd
On Thursday, I draw dark cirles under my eyes
I know I'm not wise (I know this is all lies)
My parents ask me why I look so exhausted today
I tell them I overstudy yesterday.
On Wednesday, I haven't reviewed still any lesson
I'm afraid, I'm gonna get an hour of detention
So this Monday, no way to go back to school
I'll pretend I have eaten a toadstool.
(ou pour la dernière phrase)
I'll pretend that's new home rule
I'll say it's my new golden rule
And it's not an April fool (et ce n'est pas un poisson d'avril)
voilà quelques idées. J'ai essayé de maintenit le présent comme demandé et de repecter les rimes (leurs sonorités ...)
Bonne rentrée