Hello,
J’aurai besoin d’aide pour voir mes erreurs sur ce texte que j’ai fait pour la littérature anglaise. Merci d’avance.

There was a man who didn’t want to marry a woman. He was only envious of women, who could freely be with the man they loved. Actually, the system itself gave them a soulmate during the procedure. The procedure was a sort of way everybody has to pass through to know who his or her soulmate is. They next have to look at their hands, and they’ll see that the blood vessels turned into a unique pattern. This exact pattern will show up on their soulmate’s hand too. Unfortunately, there was a rule nobody had the right to infringe: a man can’t be with another man and a woman can’t be with another woman. The procedure also knew that and never gave a man soulmate to another man or the other way round for women. Another man was always looking at women. He thought they were sumptuous humans. All of them were probably waiting for a beautiful man like him to marry them. Is that the truth though? As he turned 21 the day before, he had to go to the highway to get to know who his soulmate is. In fact, when you turned 21, it was the time for you to know who you will spend your life with. Then you marry one another. The world they both lived in was called Nighwar. Sometimes Min hwan imagined a better world, where you would have had the choice to be homosexual or heterosexual. He for sure didn’t want to stay his entire life with a woman who isn’t even his real soulmate because he likes men. However, when he went to the highway, entered the room at the middle of the road, what a surprise he had when he got his soulmate. None of that was normal. He was given a man. He knew that because of the distinctive sign he also had on the palm of his hand. It was a forbidden sign. The symbol of homosexuality, the one they erased from the world after the civil war they had. At this time, Min hwan knew his life wouldn’t be like before. He would have to hide himself from everybody. He had to flee Nighwar before that the government kills him and his partner. Regarding Dae-Hyun, everything was quite normal. He was given a wonderful woman and lived the perfect life nowadays. He truly loved her. The way he experienced life was perfectly in accordance with the society of his time: he loved a woman, shared his life with her, worked for her to have a beautiful life and was getting ready to have a child with her wife. He worked as a policeman and arrested homosexuals. Homosexuals were first tortured by them and then sent to the death row. He wasn’t really sad for them; he actually thought it was better for them not to live. Min hwan was always scared when he walked on the street. He dreads being accosted by the police. He was checking every moves people made. As he saw a man looking at his direction, he started to change his journey. Sadly, he followed him. Min hwan knew his life was close to an end. He sped up, hopeless, but the man stopped him violently. He pushed him against the wall next to them and swore. He looked at the hand of the poor man and made a wry smile. Later, the man died in pain just like every homosexuals. They killed him little by little. Dae-hyun was still happy in this unfair world, contrary to Min hwan who couldn’t even live. That was the end of his life and his story whereas Dae-hyun continued to live like nothing happened next to him. He was blinded by the system of the world he lived in without even realizing. Yet, everything was only violence.