Bonsoir, aidez-moi, s'il vous plait, je vous en supplie. Merci !

Voici le texte (rempli d'erreurs) :

''She approaching more more. I wanted to scream but I couldn't. I was fozen on the spot, I couldn't more. For the first time of my life, I was afraid of dying. I wondered if this form was an enormous white shark. But no because so didn't looked like. '' But then, what that could well be ?'' I thought. So much that I was scared, I didn't know : I wanted escape. But water was slowed me. I heard far the movements and the cries of children on the beach : I was already swimming too far. I had only a one choice : do face to face t this thing. I opened greatly my eyes for observe everything around me. When, suddenly, I seen a big white dolphin. It following me. Surprise, I rushed on the beach. ''


1) Corriger grammaticalement ce texte (oubli/ordre des mots, forme verbale adéquate...)
- la forme verbale adéquate,
- utiliser le prétérit simple à bon escient,
- utiliser le prétérit Be-ing à bon escient.

2) Ajouter au texte le superlatif et les subordonnées en When/While.
3) Corriger les phrases qui sont mal formées et la ponctuation/majuscules.
4) Ajouter des phrases en ménageant du suspense ou de l'humour pour rendre ce texte intéressant.


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