bac d'anglais !! s'il vous plait vous pouvez me corriger mon texte et me dire si il est conventionnel
Introduction :
Believing that the world can change and be better in terms of arts, sciences, technology, liberty and quality of life.
Progress implies changes, some evolution from an old order with traditions to a new order wich is not embraced by all because everybody isn’t comfortable with the changes being made.
There are many kinds of progress so i choose the social progress I will tackle this theme throughout the evolution of the customs over the time
how does the evolution of society influences the customs (les mœurs)/ statues of womens and seniors?
I will begin with an insight into the film the sufragettes by sarah gravon detailing the push for women's suffrage in the United Kingdom in 1911-13 after, I will analyse malala's history and to conclude I would like to talk about a the apparition of a funny event the senior citizen blogger.
Development :
In class we have been concentrated on the evolution of the society realtive to the women. The womens who were considered as inferior of the mens.As we can see in the film the sufragettes focused on a group of women who’s fighting for their rights of vote.
In this film we can see the lifestyle of these « irrespected » women in the 20 century. They was working very hard in the laundries where their chiefs exploit them , and when they arrived in their home their husbands telling us that women’s role are to be a good mother and and satisfy her husband’s desires.
However and althought the many obstacles that they have overcome they continue to fight with the hope of the society’s evolving in their favor.
But unfortunatly even if some situation have changed in some countries , some others kept a delicate status about this. As the pakistan , where women’s situation it’s really hard since years and with the addition since 2000 of the evolving of the attacks and invasions its just aggravates the problem ! And this situation its develop in the portrait of the « girl blogger » nickname of malala yousafzai that we can compared to the sufraggette . WHY ? my impression is that even if she’s alone (not in a group like the sufragettes ) and doesn’t fight for the same subject she’s fighting for the women’s rights. In 2009 talibans controlled a part of the pakistan in making their own sexist rules « they banned women from going to the market and they banned shopping » Even going as far as taking the assault of a schoolbus and shoot childrens like her when she was 12. But as the suffragette she found the courage to testify, address herself and commit to the rights of women’s educations until received peace nobel prize.
To conclude, we will focused on the senior citizen blogger who were especially in vancouver , chicago etc... This (chercher nom dossier » showus that there is an evolution of the senior’s hobbits . After the 20 century the senior’s hobbits was for the main part to play « bingo, needle point etc… » but now there is a real advances. Some seniors want to take part in the evolving of the society . So alone or with the help « trouver la phrase » they began to write a blog about what they like in life as a new hobbit. Now in their family i can supposed that between the grandsparents and their grandchildren they will have more proximity because they will have more common points . And i think that the grandparents will feel younger !
So to recap I’d like to wind up by saying that we can’t ignored the evolution of our society for my point of view. Some womens fought for us and i think that its my work (our work) to continue their working. Because in 2018 we are not completely free and its not right ! In addition as a human nothing its impossible like the seniors who try to change their statu of « people who can’t do anything modern » we must be courageous !
Introduction :
Believing that the world can change and be better in terms of arts, sciences, technology, liberty and quality of life.
Progress implies changes, some evolution from an old order with traditions to a new order wich is not embraced by all because everybody isn’t comfortable with the changes being made.
There are many kinds of progress so i choose the social progress I will tackle this theme throughout the evolution of the customs over the time
how does the evolution of society influences the customs (les mœurs)/ statues of womens and seniors?
I will begin with an insight into the film the sufragettes by sarah gravon detailing the push for women's suffrage in the United Kingdom in 1911-13 after, I will analyse malala's history and to conclude I would like to talk about a the apparition of a funny event the senior citizen blogger.
Development :
In class we have been concentrated on the evolution of the society realtive to the women. The womens who were considered as inferior of the mens.As we can see in the film the sufragettes focused on a group of women who’s fighting for their rights of vote.
In this film we can see the lifestyle of these « irrespected » women in the 20 century. They was working very hard in the laundries where their chiefs exploit them , and when they arrived in their home their husbands telling us that women’s role are to be a good mother and and satisfy her husband’s desires.
However and althought the many obstacles that they have overcome they continue to fight with the hope of the society’s evolving in their favor.
But unfortunatly even if some situation have changed in some countries , some others kept a delicate status about this. As the pakistan , where women’s situation it’s really hard since years and with the addition since 2000 of the evolving of the attacks and invasions its just aggravates the problem ! And this situation its develop in the portrait of the « girl blogger » nickname of malala yousafzai that we can compared to the sufraggette . WHY ? my impression is that even if she’s alone (not in a group like the sufragettes ) and doesn’t fight for the same subject she’s fighting for the women’s rights. In 2009 talibans controlled a part of the pakistan in making their own sexist rules « they banned women from going to the market and they banned shopping » Even going as far as taking the assault of a schoolbus and shoot childrens like her when she was 12. But as the suffragette she found the courage to testify, address herself and commit to the rights of women’s educations until received peace nobel prize.
To conclude, we will focused on the senior citizen blogger who were especially in vancouver , chicago etc... This (chercher nom dossier » showus that there is an evolution of the senior’s hobbits . After the 20 century the senior’s hobbits was for the main part to play « bingo, needle point etc… » but now there is a real advances. Some seniors want to take part in the evolving of the society . So alone or with the help « trouver la phrase » they began to write a blog about what they like in life as a new hobbit. Now in their family i can supposed that between the grandsparents and their grandchildren they will have more proximity because they will have more common points . And i think that the grandparents will feel younger !
So to recap I’d like to wind up by saying that we can’t ignored the evolution of our society for my point of view. Some womens fought for us and i think that its my work (our work) to continue their working. Because in 2018 we are not completely free and its not right ! In addition as a human nothing its impossible like the seniors who try to change their statu of « people who can’t do anything modern » we must be courageous !
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(j'ai corrigé en me disant que ce n'était pas un oral mais un écrit seul donc si c'est en groupe, change les "I" en "we" :D)
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I believe that the world can improve the quality of our lives in terms of arts, sciences, technology or liberty.
Progress implies some evolution from an old order (with traditions) to a new order but it wouldn't be well-accepted by all because some people wouldn't be comfortable with the changes being made.
There are many kinds of progress but i chose the social progress. I will tackle this theme throughout the evolution of the customs over the time
How does the evolution of society influence the customs / status of women and seniors?
I will begin with an insight into the Sufragettes film by Sarah Gravon detailing the push for women's suffrage in the United Kingdom in 1911-13. After that, I will be analysing Malala's history and to conclude, I'm going to talk about the apparition of a funny event : the senior citizen blogger.
Development :
In class, we have been focused on the evolution of the society relative to the women who were considered as inferior to men. As we can see in the movie, the Sufragettes is a group of women who are fighting for their right of vote.
We can also see the 20th century's lifestyle of these « irrespected » women. They were working very hard in the laundries where their chiefs exploit them. When they returned to their home, their husbands told them (us?) that women’s role is to be a good mother and and to satisfy their husband’s desires.
Although they have overcome many obstacles, they continue to fight with the hope of the society’s evolving in their favor.
Unfortunately, even if some situations have changed in some countries , some others still keep a delicate status about this. As Pakistan where women’s situation is really hard since years ago and with the evolving of the attacks since 2000 and invasions, it just aggravates the problem ! And this situation is represented in the portrait of the « girl blogger » whose nickname is Malala Yousafzai who we can compare to the sufraggette . Why ? My impression is that even if she’s alone (not in a group like the sufragettes ) and doesn’t fight for the same subject, she’s fighting for women’s rights. In 2009, Talibans controlled a part of Pakistan in making their own sexist rules : « they banned women from going to the market and shopping ». They even took the assault of a schoolbus and shot childrens like her, when she was only 12. But as the suffragette, she found the courage to testify, address herself and commit to the rights of women’s education and even received peace nobel prize for that.
To conclude, we are going to focus on the senior citizen blog who is famous especially in Vancouver , Chicago. This (chercher nom dossier) show us that there is an evolution of senior’s hobbies . After the 20th century, senior’s hobbies were, for the main part, playing « bingo, needle point etc… » but now there is a real advance. Some seniors want to take part in the evolving of the society . So alone or with the help of others (?), they began to write a blog about what they were liking in life as a new hobbit. Now in their family, I suppose that between the grandparents and their grandchildren, they will have more proximity because they will have more common points . I think that grandparents are also going to feel younger !
So to recap, I’d like to wind up by saying that we can’t ignore the evolution of our society. Some women fought for us and I think that it's our work to continue theirs. In 2018n we are not completely free and it's not right ! Nothing is impossible like seniors who try to change their status of « people who can’t do anything modern » , we must be courageous !