Bonjour j'aurais besoin qu'on le corrige ou modifie avec des meilleures phrases mon expression écrite svp Merciii.
DELMAS Jessey
17/05/2019
International Olympic Committee
Object: Poor working condition.
Committee,
I am compelled to write this letter to you because I have learned the working conditions have not been respected during the development of the articles used for the Olympic Games. As far as I know, in China children are exploited from the age of 12 years old he starts working 15 hours a day 7 days a week in the factories, which makes the shoes the bags and the balloons used during the Olympic games. It is clear that these working conditions are not acceptable. I know that the Olympics are important for many countries because it brings a lot of money to the country and therefore to the people. But I find it inconceivable that, after questioning over 300 of your employees we were informed that in China, there are indeed children and people who are exploited during the creation of objects with the logo of the Olympic Games engraved on it. After these revelations it is therefore normal that I warn you and that something is done to remedy this major problem.
Hope that you will pay attention to my letter, with kind regards, with all my greetings,
error : As for as i know , in China chidren are exploited from the age of 12 years , work 15 hour in a day , and all the week .
Explications :
sinon le reste est correcte
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emmasbg17
il y a d'autres fautes "from the age of 12 years old. They work 15 hours a day" "in factories where they are making the shoes the bags and the balloons used during" "because it brings a lot of money for them and their people" " are exploited for the" "I warn you that something will be done to remedy to this major problem"
lorinany68
ah ok merci j'avais pas fais attention v'est bizarre ...
emmasbg17
ah et il a pas les "the" dans "the shoes the bags and the balloons", et désolé je sais pas comment on fait pour répondre directement à la personne
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error : As for as i know , in China chidren are exploited from the age of 12 years , work 15 hour in a day , and all the week .
Explications :
sinon le reste est correcte