Bonjours pouvez vous s'il vous plaît me corriger mon texte en anglais, c'est plutôt important.
Merci d'avance^.^
In the darkness far out to sea, I couldn't see my neighbour but I could hear they hearts beating. On th boat the humidity level was high and we was soaked to the bone!
We were all frozen and it was very unpleasant. But I toughed it out. I was thinking about my children and about my wife that I left at home.
I was wondering if I succeed this cross, I could earn my living, provide my family and maybe fulfil my dream by opening my own bakery and with the bakery, perhaps, I could make a fortune and have a peaceful life me and everyone in my family.
It was probably 11 o'clock at night, but I'm not certain. I was losing track of time and place. I was very tired, so I fell asleep. When suddenly, I heard a smuggler who was screaming at a woman, because she was aboard without her consent and she hadn't paid the cross. The poor woman promised him to pay when we will arrived in America but the man wouldn't listen and he had ordered at two man to keep him locked up in a very small room of the boat.
A few hours later, they told us that we were going to need a resident permit, a Green Card and a work permit in order to live normally in America because otherwise we couldn't work except if we find a moonlighting but generally with these jobs the hardworking are underpaid.
They also told us that we were going to be welcomed in a shelter with others emigrants. After this speech an older man sat next to me ans asked me my job, so I told her that I had an unrewarding job because I was a garbage men despite years of study.
I also asked them questions, I asked them why does he emigrate. And he told me hopeful that he would like to join his son who's a doctor. He also told me that he wants to do him a surprise.
Strangely, I was surprised by the sincerity of his eyes, and I promised myself to help him and the poor woman during the emigration.
Then, we could finally see th American Coast and we had to swim until her.
After everyone left the boat, I went back for my book bag and something stopped me...
We forgot the woman who was crying on the room. I've picked the look. Next when she was free, she thanked me, and we get back with the others.
Je devais raconter la journey d'un réfugier avec une liste de mots imposée:
moonlighting
unrewarding job
free
peaceful
poor
hopeful
underpaid
hardworking
emigrate
make a fortune
earn a living
fulfil a dream
provide for one's family
cross
shelter
work permit
Green Card
residence permit
smuggler
emigration
emigrant
Merci d'avance^.^
In the darkness far out to sea, I couldn't see my neighbour but I could hear they hearts beating. On th boat the humidity level was high and we was soaked to the bone!
We were all frozen and it was very unpleasant. But I toughed it out. I was thinking about my children and about my wife that I left at home.
I was wondering if I succeed this cross, I could earn my living, provide my family and maybe fulfil my dream by opening my own bakery and with the bakery, perhaps, I could make a fortune and have a peaceful life me and everyone in my family.
It was probably 11 o'clock at night, but I'm not certain. I was losing track of time and place. I was very tired, so I fell asleep. When suddenly, I heard a smuggler who was screaming at a woman, because she was aboard without her consent and she hadn't paid the cross. The poor woman promised him to pay when we will arrived in America but the man wouldn't listen and he had ordered at two man to keep him locked up in a very small room of the boat.
A few hours later, they told us that we were going to need a resident permit, a Green Card and a work permit in order to live normally in America because otherwise we couldn't work except if we find a moonlighting but generally with these jobs the hardworking are underpaid.
They also told us that we were going to be welcomed in a shelter with others emigrants. After this speech an older man sat next to me ans asked me my job, so I told her that I had an unrewarding job because I was a garbage men despite years of study.
I also asked them questions, I asked them why does he emigrate. And he told me hopeful that he would like to join his son who's a doctor. He also told me that he wants to do him a surprise.
Strangely, I was surprised by the sincerity of his eyes, and I promised myself to help him and the poor woman during the emigration.
Then, we could finally see th American Coast and we had to swim until her.
After everyone left the boat, I went back for my book bag and something stopped me...
We forgot the woman who was crying on the room. I've picked the look. Next when she was free, she thanked me, and we get back with the others.
Je devais raconter la journey d'un réfugier avec une liste de mots imposée:
moonlighting
unrewarding job
free
peaceful
poor
hopeful
underpaid
hardworking
emigrate
make a fortune
earn a living
fulfil a dream
provide for one's family
cross
shelter
work permit
Green Card
residence permit
smuggler
emigration
emigrant
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In the darkness far out to sea, I couldn't see my neighbour but I could hear his heart beating. On the boat, the humidity level was high and we was soaked to the bone!
We were all frozen and it was very unpleasant. But I toughed it out. I was thinking about my children and about my wife that I left at home.
I was wondering if I succeed this cross, I could earn my living, provide my family and maybe fulfil my dream by opening my own bakery and with the bakery, perhaps, I could make a fortune and have a peaceful life me and everyone in my family.
It was probably 11 o'clock at night, but I'm not certain. I was losing track of time and place. I was very tired, so I fell asleep. When suddenly, I heard a smuggler who was screaming at a woman, because she was aboard without her consent and she hadn't paid the cross. The poor woman promised him to pay when we will arrived in America but the man wouldn't listen and he had ordered at two man to keep him locked up in a very small room of the boat.
A few hours later, they told us that we were going to need a resident permit, a Green Card and a work permit in order to live normally in America because otherwise we couldn't work except if we find a moonlighting but generally with these jobs the hardworking are underpaid.
They also told us that we were going to be welcomed in a shelter with others emigrants. After this speech an older man sat next to me and asked me my job, so I told her that I had an unrewarding job because I was a garbage men despite years of study.
I also asked them questions, I asked them why does he emigrate. And he told me hopeful that he would like to join his son who's a doctor. He also told me that he wants to do him a surprise.
Strangely, I was surprised by the sincerity of his eyes, and I promised myself to help him and the poor woman during the emigration.
Then, we could finally see the American Coast and we had to swim until her.
After everyone left the boat, I went back for my book bag and something stopped me...
We forgot the woman who was crying on the room. I've picked the look. Next when she was free, she thanked me, and we get back with the others.
Les fautes son principalement au début mais sinon ton texte est génial !! :)