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How can overcoming obstacles at school or at work make someone stronger?
We can begin at first to answer this question by using the following proverb: "that which doesn't kill us makes us stronger". This proverb means simply that to surmount any obstacle can make us stronger, since this one does not lead us to the death. Indeed, obstacles bring us to adopt a new character, a new personality, so to forge us as a human. They so contribute to make us mature. We can to illustrate this affirmation, quote the example of the professional sportsmen who, of course, before managing to reach their goal, meet obstacles as more or less severe injuries or defeats which push them exactly to surpass themselves even more, to become stronger and so achieve their goal. The most important when we overcome obstacles it’s to not give up, because it’s precisely while fighting that we can access our dreams and to come out winner of these hardships. So, it will have proved that we shall have been the strongest. Indeed, we can perceive it as a confrontation between the obstacle and the human, which allows determine which one of them will be the strongest. We can in the same case, propose the example of bad grades. Indeed, bad grades are seen as an academic failure for the concerned pupil and thus constitute for him an obstacle which he has to try to overcome. Son he has to surpass himself (just like for the example of the sportsmen) by working more or by adopting a new methodology to obtain from better results.

In conclusion, the obstacles are, among others, essential to our life for our growth. Those are very different from one individual to another, they so contribute to the diversification of the characters and the personalities.