Bonjour, quelqu’un pourrait corriger mon texte, la consigne était d'écrire un court texte sur son héro. Merci d'avance :)

My hero is my father. It is rather muscular, big, brown eyes, and short hair and strands. In his life he loves above all three things: family, sport, and work.
My father is my hero, but the hero could be anyone thanks to its business: it is military. I admire what he does every day, her courage to go into much more dangerous country than each other, to help people who are in distress, to serve his country and protect it. I am always so impressed when I saw him in his uniform, I am so proud of what he accomplished.
It is military but it is primarily my father, he taught me values and made me evolve. It was he who taught me to ride a bike, to swim, to build me. My father is my example, I would like to have courage and passion he has for his craft.